I am the lonely outer slice of the loaf.
The ugly duckling in the basket.
Unceremoniously cut off and
Crudely run through with the unforgiving knife.
Treated like the unwanted step-child.
Pray tell me, what sins am I paying for,
That I never get to play with butter,
That I am cast aside for the dog
or strewn to cajole the fishes,
That I lay forgotten in the trash,
Swapping stories of ungrateful parents
With the orange skins and banana peels.
I am the hard shield protecting the softness,
I am the solid cover for your melting bread bowls,
I am the crispy fragrance inside the welcoming bakery.
… yet, I am needed but never wanted!
A discrimination beyond me,
When I am made of the same substance as every other slice.
Is this how it works in your world too?
Discriminating based on the outside
Even while sharing the same core inside?
Grace is hosting a lovely gathering of bread talks and poetry at dVerse. I feel really bad for the outer crust of sliced bread which is almost always ignored, so I decided to show my solidarity through this poem.
Damn, I admit… I only eat that piece if it’s pumpernickel, other than that… :(… like how this blends with a bit of social commentary. We’re def all the same on the inside, you wouldn’t know by how badly some are treated because of the outer….
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The crust has its moments 🙂 Thank you Anthony for such a lovely comment!
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Ah.. yes what a wonderful metaphor for the injustices of life.. alas all too true. But personally I often prefer the end part.. the crust that is the best part of the bread.. Actually here in Sweden we eat crisp-bread a lot and that is only crust… the softness inside is all the same as you, say. Maybe the crisp outside is the best also with people… 🙂
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Thank you Bjorn! I agree, the crust brings out a burst of flavours and hidden elements that are lost in the softness. The same applies with people 🙂
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The crust, the protector and the stronger among the slices. Reminiscent of those select few given to being equipped to provide leadership for the group. Thoughtful take Prajakta!
Hank
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Thank you Hank! The leaders often take in their stride what cannot be handled by others…
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I personally really like the crust hehe… I liked your take on this, the metaphor is nicely brought out…
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The crust dipped in herbs and olive oil or just plain butter… Yummy! Thanks Madhura 🙂
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reminds of the the ugly duckling story… nice take on this prompt
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Thank you!
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I love the metaphor being used and the story within it, much deeper than bread. I do like that piece of bread though, but only if I have egg salad ready to chow down on. Other than that I allow that piece of bread to talk to the inside of the trashcan.
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Well, atleast the bread isn’t lonely in the can! Thanks a lot for your lovely comment 🙂
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I particularly like this: When I am made of the same substance as every other slice. Love the way you use the bread as a metaphor ~ We are all made the same inside but more and more we are judge by the external, our color, our language, etc ~ Thanks for playing along ~
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Thank you Grace! The prompt was truly food for thought…
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What a unique point of view. So true about bread crusts. NEEDED but often not WANTED. And, ha, I have been guilty of giving a bit of crust to my dogs. Smiles. But truly, I find, if it is GOOD bread (not store-bought) the crust is my favorite part.
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Freshly baked bread has the most amazing aromatic crust… Thank you Mary for stopping by 🙂
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The crust protect the soft inside..I like to dip the crust in olive oil and different herbs..it gives it a nice flavor..and interesting write with some hidden messages leaving the reader to ponder.
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Thank you! Crust in olive oil and herbs is my go-to snack – a little bit of grated cheese never hurts either!
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personally, I love the end piece of bread….I like the crispiness…and to think that is what we often us to hold the meatloaf together as well…so it is a very important piece of the bread in my opinion…it is interesting our perception of it though….
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Thanks Brian! I agree, the crispiness of almost any baked item holds the burst of flavours. It all comes down to preference and perception.
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clever, you’ve taken some often used cliches and made them new.
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Thank you!
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discrimination is terrible and i hope we wouldn’t judge so much by just what our eyes see..it needs those view beyond…but honestly.. in our house, we fight over who gets the crust… i think it’s the best part of the bread…smiles
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Thank you Claudia for your lovely comment… As long as the bread is not store-brought loaf, there is a war at our place as well!
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What an imaginative take on the prompt; poor Crustism issues. Clever, truthful, effective. Crust & I are on a spontaneous bent. With unsliced bread when it is toasted, I dig it, but sliced bread crust just doesn’t do it for me.
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Thanks a lot Glenn 🙂 Crustism issues – that was nice!
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Apparently the world is so full of bad practices.. it is one of those (for humans.)
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Thank you Neeraj! The crust knows…
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YES!!!! I love this and resonate with the outer slice completely.
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Thank you so much!
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So much to love about this–the metaphoric aspects, the first person write, and, above all, the meaning within. I, for one, love the end crust–toasted, with plenty of butter to clog my arteries. Ha!
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Thank you Victoria! That was a lovely comment. And personally, I feel you can never have too much butter 🙂
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Great metaphorical use of the crust! In my family, some preferred the crust of the baguette to any other parts.
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Thank you Gabriella!
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I love the crust toasted but I also use it to keep the end of the loaf fresh, so no discrimination here!
janet
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Thank you Janet… The crust will get its due one day!
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This is so good! A perfect use of the prompt for to rant about social injustices…rampant now and make me so sad and angry. The crust is the best part to many.
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Thank you Kathy… I just rolled away with the prompt and let it rise!
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Wow! The metaphors are so effective in this. A very clear message. Loved it.
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Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed this.
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It is my favorite piuece. None other tastes as good toasted, and it is also sturdier when laden with jam. I truly love this poem, and think it is sensitive and exceptional!
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Thank you Lydia for those lovely words! Crust, butter and cheese goes well too…
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ah….wonderful thoughts…..loved this,…
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Thanks a lot!
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Perfect analogy. Well done !
But it made me think that it is more nobel to be eaten by dogs and fish, or talk with other refuse than to be eaten by humans. Humans are over-rated.
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Thanks a lot Sabio! And I think you have raised an excellent point here – a spherical argument. Humans v/s the rest of the world.
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Your empathy for the first slice sounds so genuine :p lovely metaphor!!
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Thanks Rahul 🙂 Enjoy your trip now!!
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You get better with every new post!! Awesome metaphor!! 🙂 keep it up!
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Oh! Thank you 🙂
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A brilliant take on the prompt Prajakta. So true and the last lines.. it couldn’t get any better! 🙂 🙂
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Thanks a lot for such lovely comments 🙂
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he he, interesting – no one loves that side bread, good take on the prompt….Sorry I took longer to reach your post for the prompt…
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Thank you Abhra! This week got a terrific response at dVerse…
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Good, I think I told you sometime back to come forward and participate. Didn’t I?
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Although I am relatively new to dVerse I don’t think we interacted before that.
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I see – sincere apologies, there was someone who used to participate only on OLN and I encouraged her to come to poetics of MTB – thought she was you. Happy writing.
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This is absolutely beautiful. This was written so powerfully , it was as if the bread were actually sharing its’ very own feelings.
Such a metaphor for this world and all it’s discrimination.
Thanks you for sharing! 🙂
~Carl~
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Thanks a lot Carl 🙂 That was a wonderful comment.
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