
My campus ❤ This was our view that night minus the sun plus the stars
Quiet footfalls sounded the moonless night
Leaving behind a trail of secretive laughter
Raced heartbeats and soft gasps made the climb
Disappearing up a ladder of hundred steps
.
Terrace was our private opera under the skies
Power of the molten stars flaring brightly
Countless shooting diamonds cutting pitch black
Softened wishes and desires were laid bare
.
A drink here and a munch there in the twilight
Sharing sweet nothings and whispered promises
Worldly matters were someplace far far away
Spread behind us like a dimly scattered dream
.
Deep breaths under the quilts lulled into calm
Sweet field, crossing between awake and asleep
Gazing into a sky losing its fight with the sun
Presenting a view of the future times to come
The last Poetics of this year at dVerse where we are writing about stars. I couldn’t help but talk about my last night at my institute, a bunch of friends up a particularly forbidden terrace. A time of retrospection and farewells, literally on top of the world overlooking the valley with spectacles of at least ten shooting stars.
I miss those times.
” Gazing into a sky losing its fight with the sun ” : )
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Prajakta,
What a sad, happy time for you- standing at the threshold of new things and the sorrow of leaving behind familiar faces, things, paths.
Wishing you all the best in your future !
Susie
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Thank you Susie 🙂 This was almost three years back.. but feels like it happened the day before!
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You fooled us, didn’t you ?
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Ah! Never..
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Ah, you bring back all those delicious forbidden moments of my youth – a beautiful image to carry with you as you move on to the next phase of your life, and a lovely song to friendship and youth.
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There is a sense of coming of age and parting that is so strong here… and who better to share those bitter-sweet moments than the stars? I bet that whenever you gaze at them they remind you of the magic of that night, and maybe you will sit down and write a letter to a friend from that time… wonderful share.
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beautiful sight of shooting diamonds cutting pitch black & love the thrill of such adventurous night of intruding a forbidden space…
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that is beautiful.. as the sun comes up it bring new oppurtunities .. a bit sad yes for that is being left behind.. but such is Life ..
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And the sun brought many more promises with it 🙂 Thank you Bikramjit for your kind words.
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A beautiful ode to a rite of passage.
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Thanks Robb 🙂
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Ah, nostalgia. It’s an indescribable feeling, but you’ve done justice to it.
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Thanks a lot!
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Wow, if that photo is the view you saw in the distance….absolutely beautiful! I feel that this evening was a celebration, a rite of passage, enjoyed with friends. A bit more thrilling with it being on a ‘forbidden terrace.’ Nice to enjoy an escape from ‘worldly matters’ for such a delicious time!
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This is lovely, Prajakta!
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Thank you Tonya!
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Countless shooting diamonds cutting pitch black
Softened wishes and desires were laid bare
Beautiful lines 🙂
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I am deeply enamored, especially, of the phrase “molten stars.”
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Thank you for sharing your vantage point for watching the stars…and seeing your future laid out before you. I love this stanza:
“Terrace was our private opera under the skies
Power of the molten stars the flaring brightly
Countless shooting diamonds cutting pitch black
Softened wishes and desires were laid bare”
Sounds like a very special time for you.
Gayle ~
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I can feel your nostalgia for those times. A beautiful piece of work!
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Thanks a lot, Alok 🙂
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Thanks for sharing this beautiful memory and the photo to go with it. I particularly liked this line: “Countless shooting diamonds cutting pitch black.” I’m not sure why, I just do.
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Terrace was our private opera under the skies…how beautifully this sets the stage for the beautiful poem about a rite of passage in your life. Beautiful writing. Thank you.
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Ditto on the line with “private opera”….did every woman go through this romantic experience, I wonder?It certainly resonated with me!
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Every woman deserves one such romantic experience 🙂
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What a special memory, so well expressed. Thank you for sharing this.
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Seems like a lovely happy time, smiles ~ Love this line best: Terrace was our private opera under the skies ~ And there will be many more to come ~
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Time to move forward 🙂 Good luck (y)
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This was almost three years back, I have moved forward but can’t stop myself from looking back 🙂
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🙂 🙂
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Deep breaths under the quilts lulled into calm
Sweet field, crossing between awake and asleep
Gazing into a sky losing its fight with the sun
Presenting a view of the future times to come
awesome…
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Thank you very much Ravi 🙂
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Sounds delightful!
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SMiLes.. i see stars
too.. when i finish
College..
it takes me
truly decades
to finAlly find
them but
now
stars
are miNd..
and heArt..
and sure.. body..
spiRit and SoUl
weLL Being..
but work..
no.. gone..
TG.. stars
taste better.. aLiVe..:)
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Thank you for such beautiful words!
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Smiles.. My friend..:)
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So well written and describes those memories! lovely
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Thank you Lynz 🙂
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🙂
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The photo is so majestic, so perfectly complimenting your beautiful words! Loved the imagery, so emotive and smooth, the words were dropping like pearls off of silk 🙂
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That was a poetic comment Zee 🙂 Thank you!
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You’re always welcome ! 🙂
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Ah, that feeling of being on the verge. It’s just timeless.. and that imagery of looking into the ‘span of time’ overhead.. Stunning. You have a beautiful brain, Prajakta. I’m sure you would be accustomed to hear that. All the best for your ‘big thing’ due in December 2016.
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Oh thank you so much Neeraj for such wonderful comments! I take inspiration from writers like you 🙂
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Aw, that’s the sweetest thing to say. But I think: to the one who is vigilant, inspiration comes from almost everywhere.
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Imagery got me thinking 🙂
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